February 9, 2010 0 min to read

Assessment for Twins at War Arrived

Category : Blogs (Writing), Writing

So last night I received the assessment for my fiction-fantasy book “Twins at War”.

Osborne Porter Literary Services have offered a wonderful and comprehensive assessment, and in my opinion they’ve done a great job in finding weaknesses and strengths in the work. So I’m happy about that side of things.

I’m a little discouraged that I didn’t do better, though. At best, I think I scored an overall ‘average’ (putting all the scores into account) and the book is not ready to be submitted to a publisher yet. I’ve got to work on my wordiness, most of all apparently, which I’m disappointed to hear. I didn’t think it would be perfect, but was hoping I would do better.

So it’s back to fixing the book again, and I admit I’m a little tired of the work so I may put it on the shelf for a while and come back to it. For the approximately two of you out there who were looking forward to reading it in a finished form, I’m sorry 🙂 Looks like we’re still a LONG way away.

About Ryan Peter


Ryan Peter is a writer, journalist and ghostwriter from Johannesburg, South Africa. He writes fantasy, sci-fi, inspirational fiction, and on faith. Ryan is also part of the New Covenant Ministries International (NCMI) translocal team.

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    ReplyBro February 9, 2010

    Hang in there... by the time you are done with it, it would have become and epic!

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    ReplyBro February 9, 2010

    I mean, AN epic...

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    ReplyRyan Peter February 9, 2010

    Ha ha, lol. Thanks man :) :)

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    ReplyNolan Beudeker February 10, 2010

    Hey again! I too have been criticised for wordiness. Two resources I have found very useful are Strunk and White's The Elements of Style, and Bryson's Dictionary for Writers and Editors. Don't give up!

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    ReplyRyan Peter February 15, 2010

    LOL :) Thanks for the encouragement Nolan :) Will check out those resources. Really appreciate it! :)